does there have to be a coma before the "and have never got around" in the first spread??? wouldn't it go with the "or"? (not sure.. english as second language here!!)
colton, the addition of the image on spread 7 makes it's hard to read now. peaple are going to be guessing at what it says. it should make a direct impact. also, the last page really stands out from the rest. is there a reason? i guess it's because there is more white background and also more line work.
Nice stuff. I love your copyright. I think it's because it's similar to my style of writing.
The last one is great. The way it's scattered makes it that much more of random thoughts he might have in life.
I agree with Sal about "Jimi". I was really into it without the dude on the spread. It switches up your consistency in a useful way. Almost all of your spreads have people in it ("lips")and that text spread will kill. And I know your subject was "people". But just a thought.
My favorite spread is the lips one. I believe you already know that. I didn't catch any spelling errors. But try going to the Writing Center. They're sweet.
nice work!! i love you drawing. it's works great w images too. spread3, 7 and 9 is my favorite.
I think you could try to put some transparency type give a depth. ex. like spread 4. also you could make some type feel like in the original image but you add it.
I think each spread has own personality but work great together too!
looks great.
ReplyDeletei see no spelling mistakes.
does there have to be a coma before the "and have never got around" in the first spread??? wouldn't it go with the "or"? (not sure.. english as second language here!!)
el, good call. i am going to take out that comma. thanks
ReplyDeletecolton,
ReplyDeletethe addition of the image on spread 7 makes it's hard to read now. peaple are going to be guessing at what it says. it should make a direct impact.
also, the last page really stands out from the rest. is there a reason? i guess it's because there is more white background and also more line work.
Big C,
ReplyDeleteNice stuff. I love your copyright. I think it's because it's similar to my style of writing.
The last one is great. The way it's scattered makes it that much more of random thoughts he might have in life.
I agree with Sal about "Jimi". I was really into it without the dude on the spread. It switches up your consistency in a useful way. Almost all of your spreads have people in it ("lips")and that text spread will kill. And I know your subject was "people". But just a thought.
My favorite spread is the lips one. I believe you already know that. I didn't catch any spelling errors. But try going to the Writing Center. They're sweet.
Good luck duder.
Colton,
ReplyDeletenice work!! i love you drawing. it's works great w images too. spread3, 7 and 9 is my favorite.
I think you could try to put some transparency type give a depth. ex. like spread 4.
also you could make some type feel like in the original image but you add it.
I think each spread has own personality but work great together too!
peace